Question: I'm at the part where the MC ate Luna's homemade dinner (which the MC vommited) and still haven't encountered any actions/choices that will change the story and add some affection meter thing. Is there something wrong with my version of the game? I'm just reading everything (I don't have complains about the story).
Nope, everything is fine, the affection meter will be implemented in future update (When MC meets a certain character.) and player choice will be added too. ( I just don't want to put meaningless choices in to the game.)
Oh, I guess I was playing the old version? I'm honestly not even certain anymore because the old version seems better in a few ways. The only hint I have that I was playing it is in regards to the proof reading comment I saw and seeing the persons name in the credits.
Genuinely not trying to bash you or the game or anything like that, I'm leaving the below in hopes of helping you improve the game. I like the characters, the story being told and I can't wait to see more!
I think my main bits of feedback are in regards to:
The old main menu is waaayyy cooler and I thought it was one of the more unique and interesting main menus. It's truly a night and day difference. I'm sure there's a good reason for it but still, I don't think the new one is nearly as good
The removal of the gallery, even though it wasn't really needed yet because there's just one NSFW scene it gave fun little pin ups for reaching parts of the story and was still nice to have. I think the best example of this is Life Changing Choices and My Bully is My Lover.
The lighting is kinda mixed. There's some scenes where it's fine, but there are quite a few where it's a bit too intense and both characters and environments are sort of glowing and the color gets washed away a bit.
The proofreading. I understand that you paid someone to do it this time and "they did their best" but I'd recommend finding someone else to do it in the future. There's a number of obvious mistakes that makes me hope they didn't charge you too much for their work. It should be better considering you went from someone who did it for free without noticeable errors to someone who was paid to do it and having numerous obvious errors.
Like I said in a previous comment though, looking forward to seeing how things progress! Especially because of the question that was given to MC, wonder how he's going to address it after his visit to and return from Luna's.
Akira might have something to say about it and I can only imagine Nobume's reaction if she hears about it as well,
But your imagination is ours too you're like the god in this realm and we need you to unleash your imagination if you open your eyes we will see to, how can i be sure that it's there. You need to unlock the true potential within you and i believe in you... No WE believe in you. And if you ask why i need to see it for myself what's the truth cause you know I'm a degenerate myself, but the protector kind. and this phone booth its almost in every visual novel I've played. 😆
I think that the one of the worst things a storyteller can do to his audience is to spoil the story, so sorry but I will not tell you. (Btw seems like your previous comments were deleted because it was a reply to a post with spam.)
is honda supposed to be sympathetic? like yea messing with him is funny and all. but dude's just tryiing to do his job and his kinda boss and his own daughter are just mocking him and the guy's frowning and silently crying. he really doesnt deserve that at all.
Honda is a character who cant read the atmosphere and has no Tactfulness, so obviously many characters have developed some kind of a dislike for him.
For example, the only reason MC mocks him is because Honda used the prohibited word while addressing him, several times and without realizing that MC clearly does not like that word.
I mean yea but when hes sitting there crying while both him and his own daughter mock and ridicule him, you really can't help but feel for the poor guy.
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Question: I'm at the part where the MC ate Luna's homemade dinner (which the MC vommited) and still haven't encountered any actions/choices that will change the story and add some affection meter thing. Is there something wrong with my version of the game? I'm just reading everything (I don't have complains about the story).
Nope, everything is fine, the affection meter will be implemented in future update (When MC meets a certain character.) and player choice will be added too. ( I just don't want to put meaningless choices in to the game.)
I see what you did there.
Oh, I guess I was playing the old version? I'm honestly not even certain anymore because the old version seems better in a few ways. The only hint I have that I was playing it is in regards to the proof reading comment I saw and seeing the persons name in the credits.
Genuinely not trying to bash you or the game or anything like that, I'm leaving the below in hopes of helping you improve the game. I like the characters, the story being told and I can't wait to see more!
I think my main bits of feedback are in regards to:
Thanks for your comment. Constructive criticism is always welcome.
The old main menu is cooler, but not very good for a long term use. (Now the main menu will change on each chapter.)
The gallery will be added in the next update. I have some cool ideas on how to implement it.
I agree that some scenes have to much bloom. Will fix it.
The proofreading will be a top priority.
Aw, fair enough.
Like I said in a previous comment though, looking forward to seeing how things progress! Especially because of the question that was given to MC, wonder how he's going to address it after his visit to and return from Luna's.
Akira might have something to say about it and I can only imagine Nobume's reaction if she hears about it as well,
My new best friend right here.
Bro nice jokes but where 🐱? to much censorship💀
If you are talking about NSFW scenes, then this is my style for now ( Unleash your imagination.)
But your imagination is ours too you're like the god in this realm and we need you to unleash your imagination if you open your eyes we will see to, how can i be sure that it's there. You need to unlock the true potential within you and i believe in you... No WE believe in you. And if you ask why i need to see it for myself what's the truth cause you know I'm a degenerate myself, but the protector kind.
and this phone booth its almost in every visual novel I've played. 😆
But if you stick to what you believe or want I'm on your side and nice settings to the story💗 and the MC need more battle scars like Green Arrow.
Thanks for the motivation speech XD! (It made my day.)
I will think about about this.
If I'm not mistaken, Oliver had like 20%/25% of his skin covered in scars.
This doesn't have NTR and will not have it right?
No, and I do not intend to implement the absolutely worst genre in to my game.
Would you please tell me how many chapters Shin has to go through before he really accepts his family?
I think that the one of the worst things a storyteller can do to his audience is to spoil the story, so sorry but I will not tell you. (Btw seems like your previous comments were deleted because it was a reply to a post with spam.)
I got it.
By the way,could I think that Shin and Luna are the hero and heroine of this story?
This will depend on the player choice.
So there are many different endings?Excellent!
By the way,I introduce a song《大少爷和大小姐的反派生涯》,the lyrics depict a story very similar to Shin and Luna's.
Cool song, but I was not able to find english lyrics.
Lame. Not where I was hoping the part would end, was starting to get more invested in the characters and story. Didn't want it to end so soon!
The joke about being out of toilet paper caught me off guard, kinda hope they're sent out some more just to hear some more of their idle chatter.
Followed, looking forward to seeing more
stumbled over this by chance and have to admit that I'm intrigued - so far I dislike all personalities (I'm currently early in chapter 2) :)
refreshing, looking forward to see more installments of this one
is honda supposed to be sympathetic? like yea messing with him is funny and all. but dude's just tryiing to do his job and his kinda boss and his own daughter are just mocking him and the guy's frowning and silently crying. he really doesnt deserve that at all.
Honda is a character who cant read the atmosphere and has no Tactfulness, so obviously many characters have developed some kind of a dislike for him.
For example, the only reason MC mocks him is because Honda used the prohibited word while addressing him, several times and without realizing that MC clearly does not like that word.
I mean yea but when hes sitting there crying while both him and his own daughter mock and ridicule him, you really can't help but feel for the poor guy.
Well he is one of my favorite characters so I intend to do a really deep development for his character in the future.
You replaced me as the proofreader and made a remake without letting me know... really??
Well good luck, but your proofreader missed quite a few things. And I wont be helping you fix them anymore.
Although I appreciate you helping me with proofreading my older scripts, I decided to hire a paid proofreader.
Sorry if I offended you in any way, but I don't remember you agreeing or stating of becoming my full time proofreader.
I agree that it is my fault for not letting you know about my decision, it just totally slipped my mind, so, again sorry.
I mean, I was doing it for free, and your current proofreader missed many things. Your loss I guess.
Maybe, but he did his best to help me improve my script.
I like the humor and story Cant wait for more,rooting for you 9/10
Thanks!